A fairy tale begins with;
"once upon a time.."
A sea story begins;
"No sh!t ! There was this time in port'o'call....."
The juxtaposition of the two?? I dunno. Keep trying, Belize...you'll get there. Flesh it out some. Write it so's I'll feel the mist and taste the salt air.
Pirates and channels and barges, Oh my! I luv me a good yarn. I find suspension of disbelief to be refreshing.... refreshing, indeed.